Sugar
by kdillmanjones
We had to get to New Orleans. My parents had no idea. They never did.
Mike had on both pairs of sunglasses. Because one is never enough. And there I sat, watching him, watching the wind tousle his glorious hair.
We’ll make it. We’ll tie the doors together so they don’t open on the highway. Those are the words you utter before you turn up David Bowie.
And then I noticed. Beads hanging from the side mirror. Pictures of other women.
Take your own damn trip to New Orleans!
Baby, baby. You’re my foxy girl. Come on. Gimme some sugar.
* Author’s note: This is part of the Friday Fictioneer’s Writing Challenge.
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I think this will be a one-way trip for one if not both of them, although perhaps in different ways.
Give his name and location to my heroine and she’ll sort him out.
janet
I love the detail about the two pairs of sunglasses. That tells us all we need to know about Mike, even more than the pictures
Nicely written.
Aw., baby, don’t be so sensitive.
Don’t tell me you ain’t got no past loves in yo’ life.
Come here, Sugah, I’m gonna take good care o’ you.
I see a new character emerging!
‘before you turn up David Bowie’… I’ve been on some trips like that.
haha really enjoyed reading this
loved this : “We’ll tie the doors together so they don’t open on the highway.”
I was in a van like that once, where we had to hold the door shut to keep it from opening on the highway. They’re brave.
The road tri that never was…so much atmosphere in your words…
One is never enough; such a telling line. Liked this.
Mike’s bound to end up on his own regardless in which city he finds himself…
I’m still smiling…!
Sounds like Mike’s run out of pick up lines. Time to drop him off. Nice one.
well done. i’m curious – why were one pair of sunglasses not enough?
This would be a question for Mike. I’m not sure why he needed two (or why they were in the picture). He probably thinks that if one pair makes him cool, then why not two? And thus twice the coolness…
Really liked this, well done! I could see the image in my mind and it was fun to read.
Thanks for posting it!
D x
He made a mental checklist of things to do before he left. Hiding the pictures in the door was one of his things, but somehow he overlooked it. It could be a very costly miss.
Fifteen and looking for adventure? She’ll be lucky to get out of that car as the wind is already tousling Mike’s glorious hair.
I was in a car once that had baling wire holding the door shut. I lost a contact (no kidding) when the door flew open as we pulled out of the gas station and I had to dive to grab it. So, this is not as far a fetched story as some might think!
I liked this also but I felt there was more to it. Are these song lyrics?
The cooler you are the more sunglasses
very nice story.
love that second line, tells the story of his character.
Good one. I appreciate how different writers’ thoughts ran along the similar lines. I first attempted a bluebeard type story but got afraid! Good for her for getting out (in time).
Two sunglasses? I should try that!
I hope the quarrel was over as soon as it started. Cute story
Hi Kristin, thanks for dropping by my blog and liking my Friday Fictioneer post, “Thunder”